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Thursday 22 October 2015

Here is a piece of writing by Leone. He has tried to write his ideas in an interesting way and has used a couple of juicy words. However he hasn’t used any full stops or capital letters. In pairs you are going to help him by seeing if you can find where he should have included a full stop and capital letter. Can you think of any other ways he could improve his writing At mt Wellington Warriors League Club i got the trophy and we never lost a game all the games i got all the tries the score of mt wellington was 35 the other team score was 7 we won all of it we had a feed after the game they dropped us home and we had another feed we had kfc it was nice and hot i had a shower when i got home because i was muddy as i was cold at the game because it was raining hard as at night we had prize giving i was the captain in the teamHere is a piece of writing by Leone. He has tried to write his ideas in an interesting way and has used a couple of juicy words. However he hasn’t used any full stops or capital letters. In pairs you are going to help him by seeing if you can find where he should have included a full stop and capital letter. Can you think of any other ways he could improve his writing At mt Wellington Warriors League Club i got the trophy and we never lost a game all the games i got all the tries the score of mt wellington was 35 the other team score was 7 we won all of it we had a feed after the game they dropped us home and we had another feed we had kfc it was nice and hot i had a shower when i got home because i was muddy as i was cold at the game because it was raining hard as at night we had prize giving i was the captain in the team

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